The charts below show proportion of British students at one university in England who able to speak other languages in addition English, In 2000 and 2010.

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university in the UK, who were capable of speaking foreign

languages

in 2000 and 2010.

Overall

, the majority of

students

in the university have spoken Spanish compared to other

languages

while

there was an increment in the proportions of

students

who were able to speak other

languages

. In terms of Spanish speakers, the figure was at 30% in 2000 and rose to 35% in the next decade.

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growth in

students

who knew two

languages

other than English, that was accounted for 10% in 2000 and increased to 15% in 2010.

Furthermore

, undergraduates who spoke another language were at 15% in 2000 and it climbed to 20% after 10 years.

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, there was a decrement in

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who did not speak any other language, that was accounted for 20% in 2000 but reduced to 10% in 2010.

Moreover

, people who spoke only French apart from English

also

experienced a decline of 5% during the period.

Finally

, the figures for German speakers

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the same at

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percentage of 10% in both years.

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