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Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones in communication has negative effects on young people's reading and writing skill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Several people believe that the overuse of smart devices in communication has brought bad influences on young adults' reading and writing
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. In my opinion, I completely agree with
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 with, there are
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several consequences of overusing smart gadgets to communicate. Most of the users
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 on
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 feature which was
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 setting in our
smart phones
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. In order to show off their proficiency in languages, they tend to use the function to make sure they convey the message in
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For example
, not only does auto-correction helps students to
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 higher scores, but
also
 helps to find a decent job in the future.
In addition
, pupils tend to use essay
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On the contrary
, I believe the advancement of
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technology has indirectly brought us several negative impacts. The government and institutions should encourage students to write out
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essay or
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project
instead
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 out, which help in increasing
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 reading and writing skill.
School
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 should
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 during
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class. In conclusion,
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smart devices
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we still need to be aware that we can not
overutilise
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over utilise
 the devices to achieve our personal goals.
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