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The Plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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 map illustrates the university
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 now and it is predicted how look in the future after redevelopment.
Overall
, it will precited that the
sports
center
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 will be changed considerably except
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the
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 part. Outdoor courts constitute the eastern and western parts. It is predicted that both of them will be demolished and
this
 area will be replaced with other facilities. The eastern part is replaced by a
sports
 hall, dance studio, changing room and cafe. The western part of the outdoor courts will be converted into a leisure pool, changing room and
sports
 shop.
On the contrary
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 of the
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 place will be unchanged which consist of a gym ,changing room ,seating, pool and reception.
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