Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays an increasing number of
people
are becoming concerned about their health and the quality of their diet. There are two diametrically opposed opinions on the matter. Some
people
believe that each and every individual is responsible for their own health
while
others state that it is the government that must ensure that the citizens have healthy eating habits. Personally, I believe that
people
bear full responsibility for their
diets
for a number of reasons.
First,
nowadays there is a vast variety of products that everyone can choose from, ensuring a balanced diet consisting of different types of products with sufficient vitamins, proteins, carbohydrates and fats. Everyone can balance their
diets
according to
these factors and
also
based on their taste preferences.
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vegetarians will prefer beans rich in protein
while
omnivorous eaters might opt for meat
instead
.
Secondly
,
while
governments cannot considerably vary in their healthy eating programs usually adhering to
'one
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size fits all' approach, individuals know exactly what they need in order to keep fit and healthy both generally speaking and in terms of
food
. We take
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approach as we know exactly what we need to succeed in life,
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strong and healthy.
However
, others argue that the government is fully responsible for the kind of
food
its population consume because they make decisions regarding the quality of
food
their country produce and import
as well as
prices.
For instance
, in many developing
countries
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people
rarely have access to
high quality
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food
,
thus
being forced to choose something cheap like fast
food
.
Moreover
, the government can introduce legislation as regards
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what kind of
food
can be promoted, seen
for example
in many European countries where the advertising of fast
food
, alcohol and cigarettes is prohibited.
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, it is argued, can affect the way we eat and control the
diets
of the whole population. In conclusion,
while
the
governments
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may play a role in the choice of
food
of its citizens, it is still the responsibility of every individual whether to eat
healthy
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diet or not
due to
many reasons being that a variety of methods to balance their
diets
or their finances. After all our life is in our hands!
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health-conscious decisions
  • self-discipline
  • informed choices
  • personal accountability
  • regulating food industries
  • implementing policies
  • healthy eating
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies for healthy food
  • enabling environment
  • accessible
  • affordable
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