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Recently, it is common for people to not know about their neighbors. What are the reasons of this problem? And how to solve this problem?

#people #neighbors
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people
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 do not interest
about
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 their
neighbours
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 in
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last
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years
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 (
last
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 5-10years). And in
this
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 essay reasons and decisions
of
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this
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 humanity ’s problem will
scrutinised
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.
At
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 the beginning, I want to express my opinion about
relationship
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the relationship
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 between
neighbours
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. The first reason
of
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 the problem is the
lost
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 of connection between families thanks to digital technologies.
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, when we were not
any
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 mobile phones, called
people
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 were the closest friend of one family. The second one is that
livers
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the livers
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 of the earth started being introverts. They don’t know how to communicate with humans. The third thing that influenced
to
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communication between family
friends
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and friends
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 was
home
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.
In
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this
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 time we know that sitting at
home
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 is
the
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a
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 popular problem
of
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for
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people
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.
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, they hate walking and go
to
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somewhere. Their wish is only
sitting
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 at
home
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 and
watching
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watch
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 serials and films. The best solutions to the issue are the following. We should walk in the parks around the
home
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 where you live. It helps you to be independent of the phone and TV. And gives more
practices
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practice
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about
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in
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 talking with
people
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.
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, if you start to go to the park to get
fan
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fans
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 you can meet new acquaintances and
neighbours
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 In conclusion, I want to say that communication with
neighbours
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 helps
to
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you to
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 be more confident. . Because you will know who
are
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is
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 living around you and with what
people
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 are you living. And you will have more friends or close acquaintances.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community engagement
  • social isolation
  • neighborhood watch
  • local initiatives
  • virtual interaction
  • privacy concerns
  • resident mobility
  • technological advancements
  • social media influence
  • work-life balance
  • busy personal schedules
  • community events
  • local residents
  • social interaction
  • community ties
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