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Recently, it is common for people to not know about their neighbors. What are the reasons of this problem? And how to solve this problem?

#people #neighbors
We can notice that
people
 do not interest
about
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 their
neighbours
 in
last
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the last
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years
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few years
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 (
last
 5-10years). And in
this
 essay reasons and decisions
of
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this
 humanity ’s problem will
scrutinised
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.
At
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 the beginning, I want to express my opinion about
relationship
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the relationship
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 between
neighbours
. The first reason
of
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 the problem is the
lost
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 of connection between families thanks to digital technologies.
For instance
, when we were not
any
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have any
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 mobile phones, called
people
 were the closest friend of one family. The second one is that
livers
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the livers
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 of the earth started being introverts. They don’t know how to communicate with humans. The third thing that influenced
to
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communication between family
friends
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and friends
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 was
home
.
In
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this
 time we know that sitting at
home
 is
the
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a
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 popular problem
of
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for
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people
.
For example
, they hate walking and go
to
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somewhere. Their wish is only
sitting
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to sit
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 at
home
 and
watching
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 serials and films. The best solutions to the issue are the following. We should walk in the parks around the
home
 where you live. It helps you to be independent of the phone and TV. And gives more
practices
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practice
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about
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 talking with
people
.
For example
, if you start to go to the park to get
fan
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fans
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 you can meet new acquaintances and
neighbours
 In conclusion, I want to say that communication with
neighbours
 helps
to
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you to
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 be more confident. . Because you will know who
are
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 living around you and with what
people
 are you living. And you will have more friends or close acquaintances.
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