The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

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Three pie charts illustrate Americans added how many nutrients in different meals.

Overall

this

chart showed 3 types of nutrients add breakfast lunch

snacks

and

dinner

meals

while

it is clear that

most ingredients add to

dinner

To begin

with,

dinner

constitutes

sodium

and fat, and sugar 43% 37% 23% respectively.

However

Add a comma

,However

show examples

dinner

consists of little sugar and most

sugars

Fix the agreement mistake

sugar

show examples

added in

snacks

Moreover

, fat and

sodium

are

also

added

snacks

Change preposition

to snacks

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which

Change the verb form

are

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21% and 14% respectively. Thirty-one is lunch which constitutes 29%

sodium

26% fat and 19% lunch.

On the contrary

, breakfast consists of

little

Correct quantifier usage

fewer

show examples

ingredients rather than other meals. Fat and sugar amount are the same at 16%

while

sodium

is the same amount as

snacks

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Vocabulary: Replace the words snacks, dinner, sodium with synonyms.

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9Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

118 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

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Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Topic Vocabulary:

Nutrients
Unhealthy
Daily intake
Percentage
Carbohydrates
Fats
Proteins
Meals
Balanced diet
Consumption
Excess
Health implications
Obesity
Diabetes
Heart disease
Convenience foods
Fast foods
Socioeconomic factors
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Healthy eating habits
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