The chart above shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

The chart above shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.
The given graph illustrates the various volume of post-school qualifications in Australia and the
percentage
of males and
females
who held them in 1999. It is clear from the graph that the highest
qualification
for men was the skilled vocational
diploma
with 90
percent
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and as opposed to it
females
of the same course were found to be with least
percentage
is 10. The undergraduate
diploma
was the second highest
qualification
which was found with
females
that is
70
percent
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followed by men at 35
percent
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. The
percentage
of postgraduate diplomas and master's degrees was found to be almost similar for
females
that are 30 and 40 respectively. Males for
this
both courses were
also
with the same difference of 10
percent
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.
While
bachelor's degree was at the average
percentage
for both males and
females
that is
45 and 50
percent
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respectively. overview, it has been clearly seen that the highest
qualification
for men is
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a skilled vocational
diploma
, and the highest
qualification
for women was with an undergraduate
diploma
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