Nowadays many people have access to computers on a wide basis and a large number of children play computer games. What are the positive and negative impacts of playing computer games and what can be done to minimize the bad effects?
It is widely believed that these days many
people
have access to computers on a wide basis and a big number of children
play computer
games
. In my opinion, there is
certainly Correct subject-verb agreement
are
that
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apply
the
positive and negative impacts of playing Correct article usage
apply
computer
games
and there are solutions that can be done to minimize the bad effects.
On the one hand, we can see the positive impacts of playing computer
games
. Firstly
, all of
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apply
people
from Add an article
the people
children
to adults have
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apply
enjoy
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enjoyed
games
when they have spare time
because games
help them to relax with interesting feelings to balance their life after the hours of working and studying hardly
. Replace the word
hard
Secondly
, Correct article usage
the contents
contents
of Fix the agreement mistake
content
games
is
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are
desinged
attractively to Correct your spelling
designed
every one
Replace the word
everyone
has
tried to win. SoCorrect pronoun usage
who has
that
, they will use every Correct determiner usage
apply
ways
to pass levels in Change to a singular noun
way
games
. These train for their total skills of thought, observing and using fingers flexiblely
. In fact, there was a research on Tuoi tre magazine Correct your spelling
flexibly
flexible
last
year that many peoply
play Correct your spelling
people
games
on right
way would have to improve their intelligence, concentrating and memory.
Add an article
the right
On the other hand
, the drawbacks of playing computer
games
are very obvious. The
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First
first,
if children
have quitely
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quietly
freedom
to play Correct article usage
the freedom
games
, they spend all their time
to use
computers without more important Change the verb form
using
activites
Correct your spelling
activities
such
as studying, working, comunicate
with Correct your spelling
communicate
people
. So they lose a balance of both physic
and spirit. Replace the word
physics
Moreover
, especially children
can’t control their behaviours and attitude in their life and some children
can have diseases of pysology
.
With harmful effects, my view is that there are various solutions for the issue. Correct your spelling
physiology
psychology
To begin
with, people
especially should make a rule in family
to manage themselves and their Add an article
the family
children
. The law is the time
to use for games
a day. For example
, children
are
used Unnecessary verb
apply
only
Change preposition
to only
maximum
of one hour Correct article usage
a maximum
to play
Change the verb form
playing
computer
games
in
a day. Change preposition
apply
Secondly
, parents should be usually near with their children
by spending time
to chat
with each other about many topics of studying in schools, friends. Change the verb form
chatting
Thirdly
, we can replace their hobbies by reading books and go
for a walk…
In conclusion, it is commonly thought that many Wrong verb form
going
people
have access to computers for many different needs and a big number of children
play computer
games
. Personally, playing computer
games
has certainly both the
positive and negative impacts and the bad effects can be done to minimize by the suggested solutions.Correct article usage
apply
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