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The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty line in three states in the USA. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty line in three states in the USA. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided figure shows data about age, average income per person and population below
poverty
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the poverty
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line
 in 3 states:
California
,
Utah
 and
Florida
 It can be concluded from the table that
while
Florida
 has the highest
percentage
 of the elder age group,
Utah
 has the highest
percentage
 of
people
 under 18 and
this
 state
also
 has the least proportion of
population
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the population
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 below
poverty
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the poverty
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line
.
California
 has the greatest
percentage
 of average income per person and population below
poverty
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the poverty
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line
. Out of the 3 states, the proportion of
people
 aged 18 or under is
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noticeably higher in
Utah
, at 28%, the second place is
California
 with 17% and 16% in
Florida
.
On the contrary
, 23% of elderly
people
 aged 60 and more in
Florida
 compared to 13% in
California
 and only 8% in
Utah
 It can be seen that the proportion of average income per person in
California
 is higher than the other states, at 23,000$, followed up by
Florida
 with 22,000$ and 17,000$ in
Utah
. Compared to
Utah
 with only 9% and 12% in
Florida
, the
percentage
 of
people
 below
poverty
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the poverty
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line
 in
California
 is gradually high, at 16%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words poverty, line, california, utah, florida, percentage, people with synonyms.
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