Some people believe that smartphones are destroying social interactions today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is undeniable that mobile phones
has
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brought
obout
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about
significant changes in our lives
especially
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the
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way we communicate.
However
, these advancements
such
as the
use
of social media platforms and video call applications have led to
the
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reduction
of
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social
interactions
. In
this
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I will give reasons as to why I agree with
this
statement. Foremost, our communication has been improved significantly by the
use
of smartphones,
for
instance
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we can talk or send messages and photos to people who are in another country using
the
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different social media applications
such
as Snapchat, and Facebook
Also
, today someone
canattend
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can attend
meetings via the
use
of video conferencing application like zoom which they can
use
comfortably at the comfort of their homes or office
therefore
, eliminate the need for physical
interactions
.
However
,
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of
face to face
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interactions
has brought some
drawback
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in
such
settings as some decisions are made by observing
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the emotional
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and physical
ques
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cues
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of the participants. Social
interactions
are essential as they help individuals live
a
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fulfilling life and
consequently
build social skills which enable us to live harmoniously with other people. Researchers have shown that having a form of physical interaction with other human beings can greatly improve
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mental and physical health and
therefore
Increase by 40% the quality of life lived. In conclusion, as much as we acknowledge the benefits
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advancements
into
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our lives we should
also
advocate for minimal
use
so as to encourage people to become social beings.
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