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Many people have jobs that involve working shifts (i.e. working at night). What are some of the problems that shift workers might face? What can be done to solve them?

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These days, people work very hard to meet their expenses. Sometimes, they have to do
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 duties because some companies offer
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 jobs.
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,
workers
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 face issues mainly health problems which lead them to live a poor quality of life.
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, these can be solved by limiting work hours and by shuffling their duties with
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 shift employers. The major problem that
workers
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 often come across is health issues. They usually work all
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 and sleep during
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time
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.
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, they could not find enough
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 to spend with their children.
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, lack of sleep
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 sunlight and traffic noise during the
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 result in insomnia, headache, migraine and hypertension. The second problem that employers face is transportation as most of the public transport is available during
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time
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. So, it becomes difficult for them to travel at
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.
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,
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fatigue
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 they cannot perform well their duties. There are some possible solutions to the aforementioned problems.
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,
workers
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 can request their bosses to shift them to
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 duty so they can manage to spend quality
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 with their families.
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, factories and companies should arrange transport for
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 so that they can move conveniently.
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, proper medical facilities and health insurance should be provided to them. To summarize, the problems of
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 shift
workers
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 can be overcome by shuffling employers to
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 and
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 duty from
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 to
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. Companies should
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 ensure facilitate their
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 with proper medical and transport facilities.
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