The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two graphs illustrate the population trends for local and foreign university students in Australia between 2001 and 2010.
Overall
, the figure for all students from either Australia or abroad was generally increasing over the decade,
although
overseas enrolments increased at a faster rate. At the start, there were only 20000 foreign undergraduates in Australia in 2001, which was only
one twentieth
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of the local cohort back
then
.
However
, the total population of overseas college attendees rose every year through the decade to eventually reach 80000 in 2010.
In contrast
, the number of Australian undergraduates saw moderate growth between 2001 and 2007 from 400000 to 600000 but plateaued between 2007 and 2010. In comparison to the
overall
student figures, the trends for
enrolments
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enrolment
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are quite different. The yearly intake of new students from abroad increased constantly from 20000 in 2001 to 40000 in 2009 until it only saw a marginal increment in 2010,
while
the domestic intake numbers fluctuated around 200000 throughout the years.
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