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Every man has a right to proper healthcare.However,private hospitals nowadays are so profit oriented that they are distracted from providing proper healthcare facilities. In your opinion,is this profit making tendency a hindrance to proper healthcare ?

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the reality we need to accept to live in
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attention for the prize that cost to their like can be a membership or subscription of the private companies how
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guarantee
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 in good hands.
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, I know that most people think that should not be like that but
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 good politicians who represent and make the better
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 the poor
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 who can not pay that extra money to these private companies because the hospitals usually did not give the
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 the patients with the excuse they are just following the hospital or government rules, so they can not do
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 much like the other thinks they should do it. In
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everybody but we can not do too much
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Universal healthcare
  • Privatization
  • Profit-driven
  • Accessibility
  • Patient care
  • Healthcare system
  • Public sector
  • Medical ethics
  • Healthcare disparities
  • Regulatory framework
  • Equitable access
  • Health insurance
  • Quality of care
  • Corporate responsibility
  • Stakeholders
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