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The average number of hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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We can see from the bar chart that in primary, lower secondary and upper secondary
school
, the teaching
time
 per year spent by each teacher in
Japan
,
Spain
, Iceland and
USA
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 in 2001 witnessed both similarities and differences.
Teachers
 from upper secondary
school
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schools
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 in
USA
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the USA
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 topped the list of teaching
time
 per year, with an average number of approximately 1,100
hours
, followed by
Spain
 and Iceland.
However
, there was no great difference between
USA
 and
Spain
, and in
Japan
,
teachers
 in upper secondary
school
 worked only around 600
hours
.
Conversely
,
teachers
 in primary
school
 experienced a lower number of
hours
 with 900
hours
 in
USA
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the USA
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 and around 600
hours
 in
other
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 three countries. The teaching
time
 in lower secondary in
Japan
 and
Spain
 maintained almost the same as that in primary
while
 there was a significant increase in Iceland and
USA
. As to each country, in
USA
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, teaching
time
 in all three kinds maintained the longest in comparison to
other
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 three countries and in
Japan
,
teachers
 of all kinds experienced a nearly equal number of teaching
hours
. Spanish
teachers
 in high
school
 worked the longest teaching
time
, reaching about 1,000
hours
 when compared with that in primary and lower secondary.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual hours of teaching
  • teaching workload
  • educational systems
  • teacher-student ratio
  • significantly
  • slightly
  • noticeably
  • gap
  • highest/lowest number of hours
  • compare
  • contrast
  • reflect
  • variations
  • distribution of teaching hours
  • average
  • respectively
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