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Some people say that no one should work after the age of 65years,others say that they should continue the work as long as they want.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The retirement
age
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 was a place of argument by experts for
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decade
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of
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the researcher
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researcher
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researchers
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 recommend that no one have to
work
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 after his
brithday
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birthday
 65
while
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other
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others
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 disagree
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within
with
purpose
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the purpose
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 of
allowed
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allowing
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community
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 to decide regarding
to
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their
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desire
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this
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essay
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 both
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view
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views
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 will be
examin
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examined
 and I will outline why I agreed with
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 opinion. Commence with
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view
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,
expert
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experts
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 tend to define the retirement
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 in order to give the opportunity to youth
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 in case of limited
vacancy
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vacancies
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 available.
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, in
specific
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place
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places
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 the requirement of job looking for
phyiscally
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physically
physical
 strength which can not be in
by
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this
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age
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. Especially in
term
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 of
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Engineering
 or any outdoor working
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environment
as
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an
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example.
Additionaly
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Additionally
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sectors
for instance
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 in order to keep high performance and
keeping
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 up
required
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 updated policies and a new vision that cope with the new change in the world.Meanwhile,
elder
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the elder
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 people
mjority
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majority
 of them
tend
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tends
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resisent
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resistant
 to change.All
mention
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mentioned
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 reason above is one of
them
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the
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 main
ponit
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point
 of
define
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defining
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age
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the age
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 of
work
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. Turning to
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the other
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other
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another
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 side, who
agure
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argue
agree
 that
age
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 never
matter
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matters
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 when it comes to
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work
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working
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.They support their
view
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 with
reason
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the reason
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 that
eldery
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elderly
worker
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workers
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 have long years
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of experiene
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experiene
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experience
 and in order to succeed we have to benefit from them.
Addition
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 to that, working after that
age
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 would
reduced
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reduce
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 the amount of money spent through
social
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the social
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program
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programs
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 for
eldery
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elderly
pople
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people
due to
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that
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 fact that they
work
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 and pay by
them self
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themself
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 for their
won
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own
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 medication. In conclusion, both
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view
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views
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have
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has
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 their own reason
due to
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 many
factor
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factors
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 most of them related to
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the futures
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futures
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future
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 I agreed that everyone should have to
deicde
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decide
 whatever they want.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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