Today foods travel thousands of miles from the farm to the consumers. Why is this? Is it a positive or negative trend?

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food is extremely important not only to live but
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to be healthy. The type of foodstuff varies
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culture, geographical area, climate and beliefs. Some
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love to eat hot and spicy cooking and others
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not. A few decades ago, the public mainly consumes locally grown poultry, grains, fruits and vegetables.
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, nowadays, the public consumes imported different varieties of meals. There are several reasons why society eats foods which are very far away from them. Increased transportation facilities are an important cause of eating materials migration.
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, the development of advanced information technology helps us to advertise different recipes from various parts of the world. Especially, on social media, we share lots of meals and cuisine-preparing
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which
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others to buy and try new recipes. Meanwhile, competition among restaurants compels them to introduce
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a variety
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of dishes to attract customers.
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, they import lists of raw materials from long distances. Even though, eating imported meals which travel thousands of miles from the cultivated area to the consumers is
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pros and cons.
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, coconut is a highly nutritious meal, but unfortunately, coconut trees are not growing in many parts of the world.
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, importing coconuts is necessary for those area communities. On top of that exporting harvested crops will help to improve the economy.
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transportation of food will take a long time. During
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period, the essential
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nutrients
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might be lost from vegetables and fruits.
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, potatoes are rich in vitamin C, but the Vitamin C will be lost with time before consumption. Sometimes they may get infected or become poisonous
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the long storage periods. In summary, the export and import of foodstuffs, cause several harms rather than benefits, especially since
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transport takes a long distance and long duration.
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Overall, your essay addresses the topic well and provides a balanced discussion on the reasons for and outcomes of consuming foods that travel long distances. You could enhance your response by providing more specific examples and elaborating on each point to strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in structuring your argument effectively. However, try to improve the coherence by connecting your ideas more smoothly. Use transition words and phrases to create a better flow between paragraphs and points.

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