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In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is inevitable that in some regions there is numerous unemployment
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 they possess academic certificates.
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 essay will examine thoroughly the cause behind that
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 and provide a practical solution that can solve
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situation
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. To commence with, it is unarguable that in some countries the lack of working space has occurred. The fact that every year there will be always an increase in
graduates
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 makes some countries unable to suffice job vacancies for fresh
graduates
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 related to their degrees.
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, some
graduates
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 will end up being jobless rather than applying to another job that does not relate to their academics. In Jakarta for an instance, there are a lot of fresh
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 who are deciding to not work because
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 insufficient vacancies linked to their academics.
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, it is unconsciously making the number of unemployed highly qualified
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 become larger. In order to solve that
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, I believe government can provide a way for new entrepreneurs from the fresh
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 to raise up.
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, the implementation of a loan scheme for
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 who want to develop their businesses. With that notion, the fresh
graduates
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 will be able to discard their unemployment status which at the same time can open the new working space for others. In conclusion, it is unavoidable that in some countries there is a myriad of fresh
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 who are jobless.
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, in that ,
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 the authority can apply a certain scheme
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 as supporting the new business from the
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 with a particular loan plan.
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, there will be a lot of new business enterprises emerge which can
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 bring the working space for other unemployment
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