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Many people feel that media coverage has becoming increasingly biased today. Why is this? What can be done to fix this problem?

#people #media #coverage
In the present day, the
media
 is very influential.
Firstly
, the
media
 became
main
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 source of information which is
rearly
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rarely
really
 checked.
Furthermore
, given information can form or change
people
's opinions about certain topics or about other
people
.
Therefore
, it should
be discuss
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 the
resons
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reasons
of
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for
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media
convertion
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conversion
conversation
 to one side and give a plausible solution.
Firstly
,
media
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the media
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 can become one-sided to destroy a
person
's image. Nowadays, youth call
this
 “cancel culture”. One day a singer, actor or content creator could be
view
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 as caring, truthful and accepting, but on
other
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 be jobless.
This
 is usually done when some
people
 use social
media
 to tell their
uncofortable
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uncomfortable
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interations
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interactions
 with a
person
, which
is
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contradictics
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contradictions
contradicts
majory
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majority
 of
people
’s positive beliefs about a
person
. When other
people
 join in by expressing their’s negative opinion and
some time
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sometimes
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 by bringing up the mistakes of his or
hers
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her
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 past.
This
 now
masive
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massive
 group rapidly gain
others
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others'
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 attention, which
some times
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sometimes
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 even
reach
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reaches
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 companies or production. In final, leaving employers with no other choice but to cut ties with a negatively portrayed
person
.
Secondly
, journalism and the
new’s
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news
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 will hide the truth for their own benefit. It’s no secret that big beauty,
health
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and health
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 companies want to gain a lot for less.
Therefore
, making
products
 with cheap and sometimes harmful ingredients, but
puting
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putting
 effort
in
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into
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 marketing and
bying
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buying
being
of
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influencers
inorder
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in order
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 to market the product as the best of them,
in other words
, false
advertisment
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advertisement
advertising
.
This
 is a problem
,
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 because
person
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a person
the person
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 with minor knowledge of chemistry, biology or medicine will believe the
media
 or the
advertisments
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advertisements
 and buy the
products
. The
componies
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companies
 will make a lot from it, but
target
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the target
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 audience will
sufer
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suffer
 from it.
This
 biased
media
 could be fixed.
People
 trying to “take down” other
people
 should be encouraged to point out that the information
the
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they
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 give out is
theirs
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their
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 opinion and shouldn’t be taken as a fact or do their own research on that. Sold
products
 could be
monitured
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monitored
 by
goverment
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government
 authorities, which could approve
ready
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 to sell
product
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the product
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 as vitamins, body care
product
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products
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,
of
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or
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 cosmetics based on their ingredient list. In conclusion,
people
 shouldn’t blindly believe everything said by
media
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the media
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 and
look
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looks
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 into
people
 or
products
 before they buy
themselfs
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themselves
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.
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