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A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exercise and avoids stress. What should people do to stay healthy in your country? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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To stay healthy
people
 are doing different things, but mostly one needs to have balanced nutrition, physical activity, and mental peace to keep her organism fit. Feeding and lifestyle habits are different among cultures and regions. In my country
people
 have pretty unhealthy habits and lifestyles, so
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the
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most of the
people
 there do not go to the gym and very few
people
 have any physical activity on daily basis
such
 as walking or riding a bike.
Although
 we do have a very delicious national kitchen, most of that food is rich in fats and strong spices, usually meaty with a small amount or no vegetables, so it has high caloric value, resulting in a high
percent
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 of
people
 suffering from obesity, diabetes, and cardiac diseases. In my opinion,
people
 should encourage the local
goverment
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government
 to build more open gyms, organize sports events and education, especially in primary schools, about the importance of good nutrition. Except that, they should be more open to
try
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 some new
recepies
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recipes
 and international
kitchen
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kitchens
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 or to
prepare
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 traditional meals in
different
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way
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ways
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, using more vegetables and less fat and oil
for instance
. In conclusion, to stay healthy,
people
 in my country should change their feeding habits and
excercise
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exercise
 more.
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