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The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks.These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks.These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart below illustrates the percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Overall
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, It displays the intake of
sodium
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, saturated fat and added
sugar
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 consumed in meals and snacks. it is noted that the consumption of
sodium
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 is 43% in
dinner
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whereas
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 the least is the consumption of
sugar
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 in
dinner
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 at 23%. For breakfast, it is depicted that everything is normally consumed by keeping saturated fat and
sugar
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 at 16 % and least
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sodium
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as
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 14 %. For ,lunch it shows that
sodium
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 is consumed at 29% and saturated fat at 26%
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keeping the lowest as
sugar
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 at 19%. At
dinner
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, it is noted that
sodium
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 was highly consumed at 43% and saturated fat at 37% followed by the consumption of
sugar
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 at 23%
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dinner
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.
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, in ,snacks it was noted that
sugar
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 was quite high which depicts at 42% considerably having
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saturated fat at 21% and
sodium
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 at 14%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar, dinner with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "depicted" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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