In many countries, there are a lot of students who commit suicide each year. What are the reasons for this? What are the solutions?

Recently the issue has been brought into focus is the large amount of
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who
commit
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suicide
these days. people believe that nowadays
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young people are under too much pressure from many aspects, especially
students
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when they have to study too much. in my opinion, The increase in the number of
students
committing
suicide
is
due to
many reasons. Now,
i
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will discuss some common causes and solutions to
this
problem. One thing
that is
of great significance is that many teenagers
are
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commit
suicide
. There are many
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for
students
that
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have too much pressure from studying. For one thing,
parents
always want their
children
to get good marks. For another, they have to study so hard to the point where they don't have enough
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time to rest, just to please their
parents
. It may
gives
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rise to a number of
problem
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that
students
are struggle
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with making
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friend
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and they usually encounter case racial discrimination. The most familiar example of
this
is in Viet Nam,
parents
are very strict and tend to want their
children
to get the best grades, especially in exams.
Besides
, their teachers give them a lot of homework.
On the other hand
, negative influence from social networks,
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content is one of the reasons for
this
situation. It seems quite clear that
students
face
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pressure leading to depressing thoughts,
looking
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and looking
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at life in a pessimistic
way
, so they find a
way
to escape by committing
suicide
. It is
also
well known that
parents
should pay more attention to their
children
, teach them in a more appropriate
way
, and should not put lots of emphasis on academic achievement. Government is
also
responsible for
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about the education of all ages. The immediate result it produces is
students
should not be exposed to social networks too much and too early. Perhaps the obvious result is both teachers and
parents
should give them time to rest and relax after a stressful school day. A better example of
this
can be best provided
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in Japan, teaching in Japan
also
does not impose the
students
' thinking. In the same
way
,
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school
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should respect the results of the
students
, so they never publish the score
public
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, so that all of the
students
have the opportunity to study in an equal environment. It
make
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no difference that families, schools and governments have to listen to your
children
if they are going through the most difficult period of student life. In summary, it is important to protect and prevent
this
issue for minors, governments and families should take aggressive measures
due to
lots of factors
contribute
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to the high number of teen suicides each year.
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