In many countries, there are a lot of students who commit suicide each year. What are the reasons for this? What are the solutions?
Recently the issue has been brought into focus is the large amount of
student
who Fix the agreement mistake
students
commit
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commits
suicide
these days. people believe that nowadays the
young people are under too much pressure from many aspects, especially Correct article usage
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students
,
when they have to study too much. in my opinion, The increase in the number of Remove the comma
apply
students
committing suicide
is due to
many reasons. Now, i
will discuss some common causes and solutions to Change the capitalization
I
this
problem.
One thing that is
of great significance is that many teenagers are
commit Unnecessary verb
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suicide
. There are many reason
for Change to a plural noun
reasons
students
that
have too much pressure from studying. For one thing, Correct pronoun usage
apply
parents
always want their children
to get good marks. For another, they have to study so hard to the point where they don't have enough of
time to rest, just to please their Change preposition
apply
parents
. It may gives
rise to a number of Change the verb form
give
problem
that Change to a plural noun
problems
students
are struggle
with making Change the verb form
are struggling
new
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a new
friend
and they usually encounter case racial discrimination. The most familiar example of Fix the agreement mistake
friends
this
is in Viet Nam, parents
are very strict and tend to want their children
to get the best grades, especially in exams. Besides
, their teachers give them a lot of homework. On the other hand
, negative influence from social networks, bad
content is one of the reasons for Correct word choice
and bad
this
situation. It seems quite clear that students
face many
pressure leading to depressing thoughts, Replace the quantifier
much
looking
at life in a pessimistic Correct word choice
and looking
way
, so they find a way
to escape by committing suicide
.
It is also
well known that parents
should pay more attention to their children
, teach them in a more appropriate way
, and should not put lots of emphasis on academic achievement. Government is also
responsible for care
about the education of all ages. The immediate result it produces is Wrong verb form
caring
students
should not be exposed to social networks too much and too early. Perhaps the obvious result is both teachers and parents
should give them time to rest and relax after a stressful school day. A better example of this
can be best provided by
in Japan, teaching in Japan Change preposition
apply
also
does not impose the students
' thinking. In the same way
, Add an article
the school
a school
school
should respect the results of the Fix the agreement mistake
schools
students
, so they never publish the score public
, so that all of the Replace the word
publicly
students
have the opportunity to study in an equal environment. It make
no difference that families, schools and governments have to listen to your Change the verb form
makes
children
if they are going through the most difficult period of student life.
In summary, it is important to protect and prevent this
issue for minors, governments and families should take aggressive measures due to
lots of factors contribute
to the high number of teen suicides each year.Wrong verb form
contributing
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