Everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet because eating meat can cause serious health problems. Do you agree or disagree?
In today's world, a large number of people are moving towards
vegetarian
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a vegetarian
diet
instead
of meat
, after considering some detrimental effect
of red Fix the agreement mistake
effects
meat
to
their Change preposition
on
health
. In this
essay
I believe that Add a comma
essay,
vegetarian
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a vegetarian
diet
should be preferred by human
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humans
instead
of meat
.
To begin
with, there are many people who believe that meat
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a meat
diet
is better as
compared Change preposition
than
to
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apply
vegetables
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vegetable
diet
. Meat
is enrich
with protein, iron, and vitamins Change the verb form
is enriched
is enriching
whereas
people have to go for eat a lot of different vegetables
for getting
all of Change preposition
to get
these nutrition
. For Change the determiner
this nutrition
an
instance, in recent years a team of Correct article usage
apply
health
organization
monitored the effect Fix the agreement mistake
organizations
both
diets on two different Change preposition
of both
body builders
. The ones who preferred non Correct your spelling
bodybuilders
vegetarian
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non-vegetarian
diet
, had shown faster gains more changes in his
muscle growth shape than Correct pronoun usage
their
vegetarian
one. Correct article usage
the vegetarian
Therefore
, meat
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a meat
diet
is better than vegetarian
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a vegetarian
diet
in terms of getting more nutrition.
On other
hand, having Correct article usage
the other
meat
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a meat
diet
on daily
basis has some risks to Correct article usage
a daily
health
. First and a
foremost, eating Correct article usage
apply
meat
can cause diabetes, cardiovascular disease and certain
type of cancer. Add an article
a certain
HOwever
, Correct your spelling
However
vegetarian
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a vegetarian
the vegetarian
diet
is free from all these threats. For cite
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apply
an
example, recent Correct article usage
apply
health
studies have concluded that more than 30% of population
who are dependent on Add an article
the population
meat
Add an article
a meat
diet
, have attained
Verb problem
apply
health
problems some issues like
diabetes, and certain Change preposition
as
level
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levels
cancer
. Change preposition
of cancer
Moreover
, eating vegetables
instead
of meat
increase
blood circulation, Correct subject-verb agreement
increases
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and have
have
good fibers that fulfill the Correct subject-verb agreement
has
body
needs. Change noun form
body's
In addition
to this
, vegetable
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a vegetable
diet
is cheaper having less effect on global warming as meat
needs more water and food
for livestock. Hence
, vegetarian food
is not only healthy but also
gives numerous benefits to the body.
In conclusion, although
meat
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a meat
diet
is rich
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richer
of
protein and other minerals than Change preposition
in
vegetarian
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a vegetarian
diet
, vegetarian food
free
from diseases. In Add a missing verb
is free
opinion
, one should go for Correct pronoun usage
my opinion
vegetables
Change the noun form
vegetable
food
rather than meat
which can cause some problem
related to Fix the agreement mistake
problems
the
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apply
health
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