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Some People Think That It Is A Waste Of Time For High School Students To Study Literature To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #waste #time #school #students #study #literature
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The phenomenon of more and more high school
students
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consider
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Literature
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 not suitable for the modern world has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as
people
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's views on
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 issue in question may be, I totally agree that studying
Literature
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 is completely useless to young folks. Of all the reasons why
students
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 do not want to
spent
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 time on
Literature
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, probably the most significant one is that many
jobs
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 require professional skills because of technological innovation.
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, many repeatability
jobs
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 can be replaced by
artficial
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artificial
 intelligence
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 as factory
worker
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,
translator
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translators
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 and other language-related
jobs
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.
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,
graduates'
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the graduates'
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jobs
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 market will continue narrow; The employment rate of
nation
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the nation
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 will drop because the number of
literature
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 graduates keeps growing by the year. Another reason that should not be overlooked is that
people
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 who learn
literature
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 have fewer university programmes to
choice
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choose
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.
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, most university programs require all candidates must contain mathematics, science or any related certificate since a lot of subjects only can be
understanded
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understood
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 by those
students
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 who have well-calculating skills or knowledge of science. So, those
people
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 who graduated from
literature
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 cannot apply unless they spent more time and money
leaning
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learning
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 other fields in order to acquire the academic competencies they
needs
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. Under
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 line of thinking, it seems to me that
students
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study
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 other subjects at high school would bring them a better career path and wider enrollment opportunities
of
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university
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the university
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.
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, I hundred
percent
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 agree with the
people
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 who think that learning
literature
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 is wasting their time.
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