The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The provided chart reveals information about
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physical activity of women and men in Australia in 2010 and recorded from various Add an article
the regular
age
groups
. Overall
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female
had a higher percentage of regular exercise compared to Fix the agreement mistake
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male
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males
age
groups
except in
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age
15 to 24.
It can be seen that men in the youngest group did exercise most often than others (52,8%). It was Fix the agreement mistake
ages
then
followed by the three groups
of age
25 to 65 and over at 40%. However
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who
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age
35 to 44 which was lower than 40%. Nevertheless
, for women, the top three groups
that dominated the number were people age
35 to 64 (more than 50%). While
for the other age
groups
, the percentage of regular exercise of female
was lower than 50%.
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females
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, men in youngest
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the youngest
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contrast
with the other patterns which were dominated by women.Change preposition
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