The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The first diagram shows the main ingredients of a
fish
pie
in a microwaveable container while
the second one reflects the overall
process of fish
pie
production on a factory scale.
Basically, fish
pie
consists of peas submerged in a sauce, fish
fillets and potatoes
on the
top.The first step consists of Correct article usage
apply
delivery
of Add an article
the delivery
potatoes
which takes place a month before cleaning , peeling and slicing of potatoes
. The sliced potatoes
are then
boiled and left to cool down. After that, chilled potatoes
are stored in a microwaveable container. The next step is
steaming. Fresh salmon is steamed in an oven after application
of salt and lemon on it. Correct article usage
the application
The next step is
removing of
skin and bones and Change preposition
apply
inspection
Replace the word
inspecting
by
Correct pronoun usage
them by
human
visualizer, after which it is mixed with peas and dipped in a prepared sauce. Stored Correct article usage
a human
potatoes
are layered up on top of the pie
before wrapping and freezing. The pie
is then
ready to dispatch after being stored for 12 hours or less.
In summary, the production of a fish
pie
consists of the following steps, delivery of potatoes
, processing of potatoes
, steaming, preparation of pie
, packaging, freezing and delivery.Submitted by aribaatique11 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, pie, potatoes with synonyms.
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