The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The first diagram shows the main ingredients of a
fish
pie
in a microwaveable container
while
the second one reflects the
overall
process of
fish
pie
production on a factory scale. Basically,
fish
pie
consists of peas submerged in a sauce,
fish
fillets and
potatoes
on
the
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top.The first step consists of
delivery
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the delivery
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of
potatoes
which takes place a month before cleaning , peeling and slicing of
potatoes
. The sliced
potatoes
are
then
boiled and left to cool down. After that, chilled
potatoes
are stored in a microwaveable container.
The next step is
steaming. Fresh salmon is steamed in an oven after
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of salt and lemon on it.
The next step is
removing
of
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skin and bones and
inspection
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human
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visualizer, after which it is mixed with peas and dipped in a prepared sauce. Stored
potatoes
are layered up on top of the
pie
before wrapping and freezing. The
pie
is
then
ready to dispatch after being stored for 12 hours or less. In summary, the production of a
fish
pie
consists of the following steps, delivery of
potatoes
, processing of
potatoes
, steaming, preparation of
pie
, packaging, freezing and delivery.
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