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The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first diagram shows the main ingredients of a
fish
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pie
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 in a microwaveable container
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 the second one reflects the
overall
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 process of
fish
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pie
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 production on a factory scale. Basically,
fish
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pie
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 consists of peas submerged in a sauce,
fish
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 fillets and
potatoes
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 on
the
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top.The first step consists of
delivery
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the delivery
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 of
potatoes
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 which takes place a month before cleaning , peeling and slicing of
potatoes
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. The sliced
potatoes
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 are
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 boiled and left to cool down. After that, chilled
potatoes
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 are stored in a microwaveable container.
The next step is
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 steaming. Fresh salmon is steamed in an oven after
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the application
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 of salt and lemon on it.
The next step is
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 removing
of
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skin and bones and
inspection
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by
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them by
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human
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a human
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 visualizer, after which it is mixed with peas and dipped in a prepared sauce. Stored
potatoes
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 are layered up on top of the
pie
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 before wrapping and freezing. The
pie
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 is
then
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 ready to dispatch after being stored for 12 hours or less. In summary, the production of a
fish
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pie
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 consists of the following steps, delivery of
potatoes
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, processing of
potatoes
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, steaming, preparation of
pie
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 , packaging, freezing and delivery.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "the next step is".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, pie, potatoes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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