In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What are the changes occurring? Do you think these changes are positive or negative? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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last
century, almost every family were running in
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mode---- the man went out to
work
for
money
and the
women
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.
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standed
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stand
at home to take care
their
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children
.
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, it is abnormal. The role division has
ecome
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become
more and more unclear . The family
Stracture
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structure
has changed. I think
this
changing
are bring
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many positives to our
sociaty
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society
and
make
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our life better. There are three reasons to prove that
Firstly
, the family
structure
changing can make the living ability better. The cost et living has
rose
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.fastly since
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least
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century started. Not only the price of housing
,
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but
also
the food and health care. The income earned by
one
man was hard to hear a hold family, so the
tamily
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family
need
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one
more person to
work
.
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, the women started to enter the working place and become
one
of
the
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breadwinner
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.After people found that it can bring more perfect for
family
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the family
a family
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it
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they let
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the woman
a woman
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woman
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women
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go to
work
like their husbands they
stared
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started
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to encourage
woman
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women
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earn
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to earn
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money
more income means they can have a better life they can save the extra
money
for their future to buy a big house or car The family roles changed
cause
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the finance it
improve
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the loving ability
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therefore
family
structure
changing is a good thing
Secondly
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family changing can give
children
a better growth they ways of earning
money
are growing flourish,training or works which need strength are not the only choice there are more works which need strength are not the only
chice
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choice
there
are
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more
work
which
need
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needs
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knowledge A family did not need to have more than three
children
to be the farming helper and the
children
are boys or girls are
also
not important in order to allow their
children
to have a better education and resources
parents
tend to only have
one
to two
children
in
this
way they can get mine support the burden ok
parents
is
also
reduced fewer kids more success and less hard having fewer
children
is good for both
parents
and
children
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changes in family
structure
can encourage
gender
equality some people may
said
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say
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that changes in family
structure
will cause discord between the previous generation and the present generation and affect family harmony
this
does not help
gender
equality within the family but I think it
is not hold
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is not holding
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water The
structure
change from extended family into
nuclear
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the nuclear
a nuclear
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family the number of family members has been reduced from generally more than five to a maximum of five the
whloe
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whole
family consists of
parents
and
children
both
parents
are important
encomic
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economic
pillars of the family so they must cooperate well. father is no longer the host of all affairs when there are only two or
one
children
in the family
parents
take care of them regardless of
gender
some of the male and female
strereotyoes
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stereotypes
Of the older generation is wrong removing them helps men and
woman
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women
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become more equal The conclude
gender
role diversity and the emphasis on the tamale and
children
stand are
benetit
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benefit
benefits
for
affsprjng
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offspring
and
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society's
sociaty's
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society's
development
although
the changes in the family
structure
will bring some friction
but
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from the
results
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it seems that three are more advantages than disadvantages
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Family structure
  • Modern family
  • Extended family
  • Nuclear family
  • Same-sex parent families
  • Breadwinner
  • Caregiving responsibilities
  • Family dynamics
  • Globalization
  • Economic shifts
  • Migration
  • Child-free lifestyles
  • Cohabitation
  • Traditional marriage
  • Perceptions
  • Homemaker
  • Communication
  • Shared activities
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