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The line graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.

The line graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.
#line #radio #television #audiences
The line graph illustrates how people watch and listen to the
radio
 and television during the day in 1992.
Overall
, it can be seen that the number of viewers
of
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the
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television
were
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 much higher than the
listeners
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number of listeners
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of
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on
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 the
radio
. Users of both
radio
 and TV were especially active
at
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 the afternoon, at 1 PM respectively. But, before that time people
who
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 to listened
radio
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the radio
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 were higher than the
quantity
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 of TV users so it increased from under 10 per cent to over 20 per cent at 9 AM;
however
, it decreased steadily until the end of the period.
Whereas
, the audience of television had been growing up dramatically and
finally
 reached a peak at 8 PM, under the percentage of 50 and
then
 it continued to fall slowly from 10 PM to 2 AM and again rose slightly after 4 hours.
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