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The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The picture describes the process
for
Change preposition
of

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 recycling
plastic
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 bottles. It starts with deposing a
plastic
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 bottle into a correct recycling bin and after 9 steps it ends with
a
Correct article usage
the

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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 production of new products created from the already used
plastic
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

. After the
plastic
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 is thrown into a bin for
plastic
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 materials, it is picked up by a specifically modified
vehicule
Correct your spelling
vehicle

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and transported to a recycling
center
Change the spelling
centre

The spelling of center is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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 for sorting.
This
Linking Words

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 is done manually by picking the valid
plastic
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 bottles that can be used for recycling and to produce new products. In the fourth step,
plastic
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 bottles are compressed into blocs, which are
then
Linking Words

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 crushed using two wheels. The crushed plastics are washed and in the sixth step put into a specific machine that produces
plastic
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 pellets. By applying heat to the
plastic
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 pellets they are transformed into
a
Remove the article
apply

The indefinite article, a, may be redundant when used with the uncountable noun material in your sentence. Consider removing it.

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raw material and in the
last
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 step new products are manufactured from the raw material.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words plastic with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Recycling process
  • Disposal
  • Collection
  • Sorting
  • Cleaning
  • Contaminants
  • Recycling center
  • Plastic flakes
  • Melting
  • Re-shaping
  • Raw materials
  • Transformation
  • Repurposing
  • End products
  • Variety
  • Sustainability
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