The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. 150 words

The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age.

150 words
The charts illustrate the percentages of
music
albums bought by UK inhabitants divided by sex and age. The most notable trend is the similarity between the percentage of people who buy Pop and the ones who buy Rock
Music
. In these two genres, the relative numbers of purchasers are very similar, with peaks of around 30% for the age brackets of 16-24 years old and 25-34,
whereas
in the 35-44 bracket 25% of people buy these albums.
Finally
, less than 10% of people 45 years old or more buy pop or rock
music
.
On the other hand
, classical
music
has different demography of purchasers. In fact, for
this
music
, the major clients are those older than 45, with 20% of them that buy classical
music
, followed by the 25-34
group
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, with 15% of them acquiring
this
music
.
Overall
, considering gender, it can be seen how males are the major acquirers of
music
, with greater percentages confronted with women in every genre. In conclusion, it can be stated that pop and rock
music
have similar diffusion among the UK population,
while
classical is more a niche genre, which is more popular among older bands of the population.
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