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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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The graph illustrates the consequences of a survey about individuals’
coffee
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 and
tea
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 purchasing and drinking habits in five Australian provinces 4 weeks ago. Generally, the lowest
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 of
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 and
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 buying and drinking habits was bought fresh
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 in all of the five cities. The
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 of people, which went to a café for
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 or
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, in Sydney, Melbourne, and Hobart were approximately the same for each other at above 60
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.
Moreover
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, buying fresh
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percent
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 in Sydney was similar to buying instant
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 at almost 45%, but in Adelaide, it was similar to going to a café.
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, going to a
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 was the highest
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 in all cities without Adelaide
while
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 buying fresh
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 was the lowest
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 in all cities.
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, the lowest
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 of buying and drinking
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 and
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 was almost 35% which is buying fresh
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 in both Brisban and Adelaide exactly. .
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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