The maps belowshow an industrial area in the town ofNorbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 150 words

The maps belowshow an industrial area in the town ofNorbiton, and planned future development of the site.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

150 words
The maps illustrate the projected changes in an industrial
area
in the town of Norbiton.
Firstly
, it can be noted how the roundabout at the centre of the
area
is planned to have two more exits, one pointing to the north and the other one to the north-west,
while
in the southern one, which connects the
road
to the town to
this
area
, a new roundabout will be constructed on
place
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of the
acutal
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actual
crossing.
Furthermore
, in the
vicinty
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vicinity
of the
roundabout
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there will be some shops
on
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the
south-west
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southwest
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and a medical centre
on
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the
south-east
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southeast
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.
In addition
to that, the new exit on the north-east will conduce to some residences.
On the other hand
, in the east
area
, where now there are some factories, some significant changes are planned.
For instance
,
at the end
of the
road
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there will be a school,
whereas
along the
road
there will be houses
,
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and a playground. In the northern part of the
area
, where now there are only farmlands, a new
road
and bridge over the river will
be build
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, creating another residential zone.
For
this
reason, farmland
area
will be reduced to only the
north-east
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northeast
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. In conclusion, it can be stated how major changes are planned. In fact, the
area
will have some great developments, probably to give to the new inhabitants some necessary services and
accomodations
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accommodations
.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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