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The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.

The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.
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The line chart elucidates the data on how the request for information was selected into 3 groups namely, in person, by letter/email, and by telephone at a tourist office had been changed over 6 months in the UK.
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, at the beginning of period 2 indexes experienced a downward trend. Considering the statistics from the chart the number of
people
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 registered by telephone, in January
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accounted for well over 900
people
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, which one month later declined to 800. From February the index gradually climbed to 1000 and during one month from ,march it maintained the same level, which steadily rose from
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 onwards. As far as the information registered by letter/email is concerned, from January the trend gradually dropped from 790 to 700,
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, for about one month remained constant. From March to May indicators dramatically declined, which stabilized until the end of June, demonstrating just under 400
people
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. With regards to the number of
people
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 recorded in person, the trend rocketed reaching almost 5 times higher results from over 400.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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