You want to learn a language. There is a teacher near to where you live. Write a letter to the teacher. In the letter Say how you came to know about him/her Explain why you want to learn Ask what help they can offer

Dear sir or madam I am
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writing
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a letter to you to bestow
me
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want to learn a new
language
from you As is
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known that i am from
navai city
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moved to
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which
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start
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preparing for university.
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need
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for my job. The most
indespansable
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ought to be inferred is that
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made from my mym to search best
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teacher.
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friend give me your address. As is it clear that
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most
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enter to university.
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want to learn
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english
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language
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am
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to
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languages.especially,
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japanse
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Japanese
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and others.
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sentense
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best
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. I want to get
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band score
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Then
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would help you tutor. Because
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am keen on
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teaching.
Yourth
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Yours
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Jackson
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the letter follows a clear structure with an opening greeting, body paragraphs, and a closing statement.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary and ensure that words are used accurately and appropriately.
grammatical range
Review grammar usage and apply varied sentence structures to demonstrate a strong command of the language.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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