Some people think that it's good for a country's culture if people watch some imported film or TV programs while some people argue that it could be better if people watch films of their own culture. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Watching TV programs and
films
is a kind of thriller for each one of us,
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some folks tend to watch local
drama
and TV shows, others would prefer watching imported
films
, I would support the second trend for numerous reasons. In
this
essay, I am going to discuss these two viewpoints and explain mine.
To begin
with, the benefits of watching international
movies
and programs are to
exploring
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other
nations
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cultures and habits, we do not have to visit outside new places to discover
it
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, we can go throw
this
journey by watching a movie or a documentary discussing these undiscovered places.
For example
, without Hollywood
movies
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we could not imagine
the
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life outside
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in
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others
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plantes
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planets
like Mars.
Hence
, these science fiction
films
could not ever
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by domestic
drama
producers,
subsequently
, those who argue that local
drama
are
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more
benefical
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beneficial
would not experience
this
entertainment in global
movies
.
On the other hand
,
local
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drama
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which
discuss
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the
nation
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history
,
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could be valuable for citizens to know more about their own history,
moreover
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they
honor
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the historical heroes by making
films
about their lives and how much they had suffered and made sacrifices for their own motherland.
For instance
, in Egypt,
the
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national television produced a film about the 6th October war to
honor
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people who gave their lives for
this
soil.
However
, local
drama
is sometimes
greatful
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grateful
, it
also
could be a tool to manipulate
the
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folks
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minds,
for example
in a certain situation when a government wants to justify its political decision, it uses local tv shows to accomplish that. In conclusion, it is up to each one of us, these two topics have advantages,
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I believe that watching international
movies
is more beneficial than local
drama
.
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