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Littering in cities is an increasing problem which needs to be dealt with. Some people think that steeper fines is the best way to deal with the problem.

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Nowadays, littering in cities is an increasing problem, and
which
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it
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 needs to be dealt with wrestle with
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 occasion. Some people think that penalty fines
is
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are
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best
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the best
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 way to deal with the problem, and I agree with
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 given statement.
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 with, most people do not care about
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environmental pollution, and these events spontaneously originate a lot of hassles.
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, most teenagers buy a variety of
products
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 from markets. After that, they throw away their trash anywhere, and it disposes
of
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bad effects on our health.
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, Germany is regarding one of the clean
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countries
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country
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 in the world.
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 is because, there is enough proof,
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,
this
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country
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 instituted insane content about
plastic
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products
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. If you put your
plastic
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 into the machine,
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 you can take a free ticket to the subway or
products
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 from markets at an affordable quantity to your
plastic
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.
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, if every
country
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 reforms like that rules or laws, and simultaneously it
is dispose
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is disposed
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 of reduce the amount of trash.
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, in my
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country
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,country
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 a lot of people throw away their litter anywhere, especially if they go to the common areas,
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 as parks, cities or environmental avenues.
This
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 is because
,
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apply
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 Uzbekistan had a lack of trash bins in our surroundings. Thereby, we should strictly give punishment to guilties. If a person has already been fined twice for littering and
third
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the third
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times
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time
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 he or she is committing the same mistake,
then
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 should give a punishment towards
police
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the police
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this
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 will help to
reducing
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the
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apply
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littering
common
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of common
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 urban areas.
Take
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Taking
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 everything
in to
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into
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 account, the government should make a lot of rewards
for
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to
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 their population or
reduc e
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reduce
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plastic
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products
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 and replace
plastic
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by
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with
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 paper bags.
This
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 is because, ductile needs one century for erosion, and it is to originate enough problems for our environment.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban sanitation
  • Deterrence
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Public awareness
  • Civic responsibility
  • Enforcement measures
  • Sanctions
  • Penalties
  • Recycling initiatives
  • Behavioral change
  • Socio-economic impact
  • Cost-effective
  • Infrastructure for waste management
  • Community service
  • Sustainable practices
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