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Some people think that good teamwork makes a company successful, others think that good leadership is the reason behind the success of a company. Discuss the both views and give your opinion

#people #teamwork #company #leadership #reason #success
Littering in cities is an increasing problem which needs to be dealt with.Some
people
 think that steeper
fines
 are the best way to deal with the problem. It is a popular belief that nowadays littering continues to be an escalating issue which requires urgent intervention. In my ,opinion
while
 steeper
fines
 are an effective method to approach
this
 problem ,it is not the only available option.
This
 is because everyone currently throws away littering on the street.So, by the way,
people
 be ruined the environment.
Also
 harmful to nature and creatures. As
such
 whenever someone throws away littering immediately steeper
fines
 to
people
. Increasing the
fines
 will make
people
 take littering more seriously. The reason is that the majority of
people
 littering the streets do so because there are no bins available to put their waste in and they do not wish to carry their rubbish with them until they find a bin. On the other ,hand Germany can be an example, here
people
 throw away rubbish in separate bins. We can do the same in our country.
People
 pay time, by the way, to prevent our surrounding conditions. As
such
 we save the fauna and flora from catastrophe.
To conclude
, again we planting more trees to prevent air pollution.
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