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Nowdays many people choose to be self employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self employed?

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Numerous
people
 choose to be self-employed
instead
 of working for a
company
 because
this
 can generate income and increase the flexibility of their working time and location. Other workers argue that being self-employed can increase the risk of getting less income than working for a
company
 if the
business
 doesn'
t
 make
much
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profits
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. Working for yourself means that you are the owner of the
business
. As the owner,
people
 get all the
profits
 after deducting the cost including the rent of the office, electricity and water bills and stationery. Without sharing the
profits
 with employers and other co-workers,
people
 can improve their income when their
business
 goes well which is essential to a country's economic growth. Huge
profits
 from being self-employed attract more
people
 to choose to
work
 on their own rather than for an organization. Another reason is that
people
 can enjoy greater flexibility in working hours and location. When
people
 don'
t
work
 for the employer, they don'
t
 have to worry about following the fixed timetable and working hours on a weekly basis. Self-employees may be able to decide when to start a day.
For example
, if
people
work
 for international
business
 trade, she/he could choose to
work
 in the afternoon or evening to comply with the cooperator's or customers' time zone which can increase the number of trade and provide better customer service. Considering the working location,
people
 could
work
 in a cafe, at home rather than in the office all the time which can help them develop a creative mindset.
For example
, self-employees who
work
 as clothes designers need to have innovative and creative ideas for clothes. Sitting in the cafe and observing what
people
 wear might potentially give designers insight into what they should draw on their sketchbooks which may actually pave the way
of
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 their careers. One of the disadvantages of being self-employed is that if the
business
 doesn'
t
 operate smoothly, the owner may lose money or even go bankrupt. It's a higher risk to run your own
business
 than to
work
 as an employee.
People
 can get a salary based on their contract when they
work
 for a
company
. Even though the productivity and profitability of the
company
 have dropped,
people
 can still get paid. On the opposite, if they are self-employed, they won'
t
 be able to get paid.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Flexibility
  • Autonomy
  • Work-life integration
  • Increased control
  • Fluctuating earnings
  • Administrative tasks
  • Marketing and financial management
  • Potential isolation
  • Social interaction
  • Disconnectedness
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