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The line graph illustrates the number of travelers visiting a specific Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017.

The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of
travelers
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travellers
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 visiting a specific Caribbean
island
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 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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,
although
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visitors
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 who stayed on cruise ships were
initially
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 the least amount that was taking place in, it surpassed
visitors
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 that stayed on the
island
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.
In addition
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, the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 increased
while
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 remaining at the top. In the first three years of
visitors
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 that stayed on cruise ships, it fluctuated resulting in almost the same drop. But after 2012, it continued to rise steadily for another 5 years reaching 2
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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visitors
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. For
visitors
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 who stayed on the
island
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 remained the same for a year
then
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 seemed to increase until 2013
that
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which
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 maintained
1.5
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at 1.5
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million
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millions
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million
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of
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apply
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people for the next 2 years. After
having
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a small change between 2015 and 2017, it resulted in 1.5
millions
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million
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 which
was
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were
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 the smallest among the three figures.The total
number
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 of people who visited the Caribbean
island
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 reached 3.5 times more than
2010
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in 2010
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 in 2017.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 4 times.
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