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University students often focus on one subject. However, some people think that universities should encourage students to learn a range of other subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent times, students tend to target a single subject rather than the conventional practice of equal importance towards multiple streams.
Although
 some believe that, it is better to concentrate on one
instead
 of having half-baked knowledge of everything, in
this
 essay, I would like to substantiate my claim with the corresponding examples of why greater emphasis towards multiple pathways will have more advantage.
Firstly
, potential graduates must hone their education to focus on varied streams to attract a different set of industries during job searches.
This
 is because the fluctuating demands of each field make it difficult to ace a career if the spotlight is rather given to a single major.
For instance
, in the
last
 four years, the automobile industry was down
due to
 various reasons, and classmates who took that as their major credit suffered to land a job
in contrast
 to others who equally focussed on general mechanical engineering.
As a result
, it is essential to have a wider range of knowledge to ace employment upon graduating.
Secondly
, it is important to consider that in
this
 modern digital world with the industrial 4.0 revolution, each and every subject is interlinked to have a good strong hold on the broader scheme of things.
For example
, once there were subjects like programming that just focussed on the front-end development alone, but nowadays the demand has shifted to full-stack development.
In contrast
, when their peers just focus on a single major, the chances of gaining a whole-some knowledge would be minimised as subjects are massively interlinked.
To conclude
,
although
 having an interest towards a single academical stream is paramount, majoring in that credit alone will have consequences in getting the full picture of the subject and eventually landing a potential job offer
due to
 the ways how the industry is progressing as mentioned with the examples above.
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