Young people who commit crimes should be treates in the same as adults who commit crime. To what extent you agree or disagree?

The diagram
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us the process
how
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rain
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rainwater
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water
is collected and
then
treated to be used as drinking
water
in an Australian town. First of all, in the upper right corner of
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diagram
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we can see the start of the process. Rainwater from the roof
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to the pipe and
then
fall into the drain.
After
this
liquid through pipes that are located under houses
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below to the first stage of treatment:
water
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the water
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filter. After that
water
collected
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in
the
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huge bucket which is called storage. Because of the pressure
water
move to the second step of treatment. It
is
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also
looks like
square
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bucket with
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for chemicals on the top.
On
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this
stage
water
and chemicals have
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and
water
became
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cleaner. The
last
phase of
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process
begin
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when
water
after
chemical
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a chemical
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reaction
rise
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up the pipe into the house.
Overall
,only
after
this
manipulation
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people in Australian
town
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can drink
rain
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rainwater
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water
.
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