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Today most people get married and give birth in their 30s rather than when they younger is it positive and negative development in your opinion.

#people #birth #development
society is in
continuos
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continuous
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 transformation.
Women
 are part of
this
changing
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 and if they used to give
birth
 at a very young age, now they are more independent and there is less
pression
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pressure
 from
the
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society.
Therefore
 the average woman doesn't give
birth
 before her 30s anymore. I believe that
this
 phenomenon clearly shows how
women
 are less suppressed and they are able to decide when to give
birth
.
This
 is particularly important, especially
beacuse
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because
 many
women
 were forced into
malking
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making
children's
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children
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 from their
family
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families
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,
as a
result
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 girls were giving
birth
 at a very young age. Leaving in danger the mom and the infant
.
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 I believe that
women
 are now certainly more in control than they were just a few decades ago, showing the importance of being free and
to decide
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 for
you
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your
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 own
body
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bodies
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.
Them
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Their
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 giving
birth
 during their 30s
it
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is just a sign of emancipation
as a result
 of
women
's long trip to freedom
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