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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010
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The chart compares the Australian males' and females' physical
activity
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 on a regular basis
according to
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 six
age
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 categories in the year 2010.
Overall
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,
women
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 older than 25 tended to be more physically active rather than
men
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 of the same
age
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,
while
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 the opposite is true for
men
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 and
women
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 under 24. It is safe to say that both
men
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's and
women
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's percentages showed fluctuations during the ages.
Men
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's physical
activity
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 declined significantly at the
age
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 of 15-24 to 35-44 (from 52.8% to 39.5%) and after 44 there was a declining trend in the amount of
men
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's exercise ( reduced by about 7%).
On the other hand
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, the percentage of Australian
women
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 doing regular physical
activity
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 increased at the
age
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 of 44, almost did not differ until the
age
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 of 64 and
then
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 reduced. The amount of physical
activity
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 in
women
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 aged between 45 to 54, which is the highest, accounted for 53.3% and the lowest, which was contributed to
women
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 over 65, accounted for 47.1%,
whereas
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 the highest percentage of physical
activity
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 in
men
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 stood at 52.8% for whom at
age
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 of 15-24 and the lowest was 39.5% for
men
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 aged between 35 to 44.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words activity, age, women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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