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The word is experiencing a dramatic increase in population, thus is causing problem not only for poor, undeveloped countries, but also fir industrialised and developing nations. describe some of the problem that overpopulation causes, and suggest at least on possible solution.

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Nowadays, an increasing number of
people
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 cause the phenomenon of
overpopulation
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. World is faced
to
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 a variety of
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 introduced by
overpopulation
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such
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 as poor. It's essential to thoroughly explore these
problems
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 since
which
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matters
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countries
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as well as
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 individuals.
This
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problems
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 and provide some solutions in the forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin
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 with,
overpopolation
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overpopulation
 will lead to
scarse
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scarce
scars
resources
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 allocated to individuals as the whole
resources
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 are fixed in the world. There are two types of
resouces
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resources
i
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wanna to
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 talk about, natural
resouces
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resources
 and human
resources
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.
Firstly
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, the food
people
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eating
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everyday
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 almost consists of natural
resources
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such
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 as meat and vegetable.
Although
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 modern technology tends to invent the recreated natural
resources
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, which are not received by most
people
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 in their opinions.
Secondly
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, human
resources
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 are limited.
For example
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,
one-to-one
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a one-to-one
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 education pattern can effectively allow the teacher to focus on one student. Teachers are not conscious of the
true
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 that they often ignore some when the classroom contains too
much
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many
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 students.
In addition
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,
overpopulation
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 will
also
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accelate
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accelerate
 the loss of
weath
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health
.
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,
people
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 raised many children to ensure the labour of a family. The only critical thing they consider
about
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is how to make their kids escape from hunger. In fact, as the saying 'poor
people
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poorer
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', the lack of education leads to the lack of wealth. Children who grow up in
such
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 environments are unconscious of the awareness of creating.
To conclude
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, authorities should
adapt
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 compulsory instructions to limit the
number of
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population.
Besides
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, it can
also
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 be
alliviated
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alleviated
 through publicities on the
problems
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 generated from
overpopulation
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.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dramatic increase
  • undeveloped countries
  • industrialised nations
  • resource strain
  • environmental degradation
  • food security
  • malnutrition
  • unemployment rates
  • economic instability
  • healthcare challenges
  • mortality rates
  • infectious diseases
  • urban overcrowding
  • strained infrastructure
  • pollution levels
  • educational resources
  • family planning programs
  • living standards
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