The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.
The figure shows the percentage regarding the number of
people
that
born
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were born
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in
Australia
and outside
Australia
living in three different areas in 1995 and 2010.
Overall
, the percentage of
people
who
born
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were born
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outside
Australia
higher
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was higher
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than
people
who
born
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were born
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in
Australia
in 1995. Meanwhile, the percentage of
people
who
born
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were born
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either outside or in
Australia
has
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same
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in 2010 which approximately 95% in total. In 1995 and 2010, most
people
living in cities
are
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were
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born
in
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apply
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outside
Australia
.
Moreover
,
people
who live in towns slightly decreased both in 1995 and 2010.
People
who live in rural areas
is fluctuated
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wildly in 1995 and 2010, which is approximately 30%
people
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of people
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born in
Australia
and 40% born
in
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apply
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outside
Australia
in 1995. In 2010,
people
who live in rural areas slightly decreased which is approximately 15%
was
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were
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born in
Australia
and 5%
born
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were born
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in
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apply
show examples
outside
Australia
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, australia with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • urbanization
  • migration patterns
  • population distribution
  • percentage points
  • growth rate
  • decline
  • trend analysis
  • socioeconomic factors
  • infrastructure development
  • rural exodus
  • census data
  • lifestyle changes
  • residential patterns
  • immigration policies
  • emigration
  • natural increase
  • birth rate
  • settlement patterns
  • push and pull factors
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