You recently stayed at a hotel for a conference with your company and there were several problems with your room. Write to the hotel management to complain. Include · Where you stayed · What the problems were · How they can fix your complaints

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Dear

Hotel

Management, I am Phaneendra, I

have

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stayed in your

hotel

TGF Bannerghatta branch between February 1-6 to attend my company conference, I stayed in

room

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between

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this

period. During my

stay

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I faced a few problems, through

this

letter I want to highlight those to the management. In the

room

I stayed I faced frequent power cuts both in the morning

as well as

in the evening,

in addition

this

the TV was

also

not working.

Moreover

, there was no

fan

available in the

room

, I have sinusitis, so I prefer

fan

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over AC.

On the other hand

, I had to wait for

long

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time to get the food served from the

hotel linked

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restaurant. I have complained to the manager available at the reception, but he did not resolve the issues. I agree that power cuts are not in the hands of the management

however

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maintaining a generator would be helpful whenever there is

power

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cut, it can simply be turned on and run the

hotel

Also

, fixing a

fan

in every

room

is not going to be a costly affair, not all people would use AC,

few

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would prefer turning on

fan

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over AC.

Furthermore

, you should assign one person to pay bills

such

as TV cable, electricity and water, every month on time so that those services are not disconnected. And

also

you should make sure that food orders are served faster either by giving higher priority to

hotel

guests or by hiring additional chefs. I hope you will consider my letter

serious

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and fix the issues. yours sincerely, Phaneendra

sai

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Submitted by Phaneendra on Sun Feb 19 2023

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9Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

269 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with...
...which I encountered during my recent stay at...
The first issue was...
Additionally, I found that...
Moreover, the... was not up to standard.
I suggest that...
This experience has left me...
I hope you will address these concerns promptly by...
To improve your service, you could...
As a form of compensation, I would appreciate...

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You recently stayed at a hotel for a conference with your company and there were several problems with your room. Write to the hotel management to complain. Include · Where you stayed · What the problems were · How they can fix your complaints

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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