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It is a commonly held belief that death penalty is a good deterrent to prevent heinous crimes. However, others believe that lifelong imprisonment is a better deterrent. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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For a long time, there has been a debate that capital
punishment
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 should be given to
criminal
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criminals
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 who
have
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 committed serious
crimes
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, but few
others
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 argue that they should be given
life
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 imprisonment. In
this
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essay
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 I will discuss both
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views and explain why
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death
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the death
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penalty
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 should be abolished. To embark upon, many
people
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 believe that
people
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 should be given
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death
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the death
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penalty
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 for serious
crimes
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such
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 as murder.
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 to
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this
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 they
also
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 think that these
people
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 cannot be changed in the prison environment so capital
punishment
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 is the only way
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 so
that
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it sets an example for
others
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.
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, there are other
people
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 who argue that capital
punishment
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 should be abolished, as giving
such
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punishment
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 makes
system
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the system
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 no different from the criminal who has committed a murder,
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 in reality,
this
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 has no effect on
people
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, more and more
such
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crimes
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 are happening. Many
countries
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 in the world have abolished
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death
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the death
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penalty
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 in their systems
although
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 few
countries
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 still follow. These set of humans argue that the environment in which these criminals grew up and the situations that they have
face
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 would have made them commit
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this kind
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these kinds
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 of
mistakes
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mistake
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 in their
life
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, so they should be given chance to change their
behavior
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 and transform into
a
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new
life
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.
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, with
right
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the right
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 kind of counselling and
guidance
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 these
people
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 can change their mindset and start a new beginning.
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, no one has any right to take
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others
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others'
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life
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 even by the law that governs
countries
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. In conclusion, we have discussed why few
people
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 think that capital
punishment
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 should be given to serious
crimes
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such
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 as
murders
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murder
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 as these
people
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 cannot be changed,
also
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 few
others
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 argue that
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death
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the death
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penalty
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 should be abolished as
this
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 has no effect on
crimes
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 being committed and that no one has any right to take
others
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life
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 even by the law that governs
countries
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.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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