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in a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport

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People have different views about improving
transportation
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 infrastructure. Some people believe that it is better to construct new railway
lines
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 and few other argue that fixing the existing transport
issues
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 should be enough. I will examine both views and give my opinion. On the one hand, in the modern world,
time
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 is precious for everyone, so the government should consider that
while
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 planning the budget for improving
transportation
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 facilities. Existing railway
lines
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 may not accommodate bullet
trains
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,
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 building new
lines
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 is the better option to
adopt
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 high-speed
trains
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 to reduce travelling
time
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 between cities.
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, in ,India it will take 20 to 24 hours to reach Delhi from Hyderabad,
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 bullet
trains
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 can reach in 5 to 6 hours. It will save a lot of
time
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 for passengers so that they can spend that
time
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 on some other work.
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, other groups of people advocate that The government should spend funds on improving the existing
transportation
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 by fixing the long pending
issues
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. They think that the existing network is sufficient for current needs, but it needs a little bit of improvement.
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, U.K. subway
trains
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 are getting delayed because of engine repairs and track
issues
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.
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 the authorities should focus on fixing these
issues
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 rather than constructing new
lines
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 or buying new
trains
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 so that the government can save huge money to spend on other required sectors.
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, I believe repairs tend to repeat again and again. So constructing new
lines
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 and adopting new
trains
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 is better for modern
transportation
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 needs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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