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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. what are the reasons for this .? How can people reaserch this ?

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In some parts of the world, many people are interested in finding out about the history of the house or the apartment they stay in.
To begin
 with, people wanted to know the history of
home
 building.
this
 is because
,
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 the older owner who had stayed in
this
home
 can advertise it as some actor
home
 by which they can get a decent amount which the owner is expecting. In
this
 process, the buyer has to evaluate the history of the
home
 as the building might cost lots of repair in it and decide whether to take it or not.
Moreover
, as the prices of land are increasing day by day in India and some other countries,
it
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is
public
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 who are hunting to buy houses or open lands are selling at lesser prices by knowing the condition of the buildings. On the other side,
public
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 can do research on the internet as they are a lot of information available about renting or buying a
home
.
Furthermore
, local folk who live in suburban areas can
also
 help, as they have lots of information about the society who wanted to sell the house
due to
 some reason. there are
also
 some folk who need to sell their house on the basis of medical treatment and can contact a broker who can help as quickly as possible by spreading the news in his network. All and all hunting for old houses has always been a trend because
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folk are in the race to buy
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home
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it
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 can be useful for them in future or they can take a loan from the bank keeping the land as collateral proof.
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