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Percentage of households with electrical appliances and number of housework per week between 1920 and 2019

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The line graph provides information about the percentage of house stuff with electrical appliances and the second graph illustrates the number of hours of housework per week between 1920 and 2019 years. It is clearly shown that
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 a sharp increase in electrical appliances induces, a rapidly reduce of hours which were spent on housework, especially washing clothes , preparing meals , and cleaning . The ratio of refrigerators was almost null in 1920 , but, it increased sharply and it arrived at 100% at first . In 1940, per cent of electrical appliances almost equated from 50% to 60%,
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after
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 year the number of refrigerators and vacuum cleaner usages enormously rise , but the ratio of washing machines stayed moderately. The second graph shows that , the number of hours of housekeeping. The amount of housekeeping time decreased considerably from 50% to 20 % between 1920 and 1940 years .
Then
,it continued to decline slowly .
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