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Some people tend to take temporary jobs, for they have time to do other things. Do the advantage outweighs disadvantage?

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In the modern era, working for a short
time
 becomes popular. Some people believe that it has a plethora of benefits
such
 as earning money fast when you needed urgently, rehabilitating your
life
 in special
cases
 and so on.
However
, there are arguments like low-salary, unstable
life
 and no career promotion. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides of one coin and draw my own opinion. Let’s start by looking at the advantages. Temporary
jobs
 can help to make money for more relevant things in your
life
. What I mean by saying
this
 is that if you study at the University you should pay for
this
 and temporary
jobs
 like in
restaurant
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 or bars on vacation can considerably help to pay for it.
In addition
, working for a short
time
 can assist to rehabilitate your
life
 in a particular
time
 period.
For example
, many inmates when they are released from prison should adapt to a new lifestyle especially after
doing
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a long
time
. They are not qualified for some acute
jobs
 and temporary
jobs
 are the best way to adapt.
On the other hand
, working for a short
time
 doesn’t ensure a good salary. It is obvious because in many
cases
 temporary
jobs
 are not needed some real qualifications or certificates from college. Take
delivery
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 company as an example. Most of the workers in these companies don’t have any diplomas yet (because many of them are students, pupils, toddlers etc.). Another drawback is in many situations temporary work cannot ensure you a bright career promotion and lead to unstable
life
. It means that you actually don’t work in these types of
jobs
 for a long
time
, because companies hire you just for a
while
 or to finish one job and
then
 you need to look for another job.
This
 scenario leads to a disorder in
life
. What’s more, it’s difficult to focus on goals and organise your
life
.
As a result
 people just emotionally
burnout
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. In conclusion, temporary
jobs
 actually can assist you
in particular
cases
 as I wrote above. But if you want balanced
life
 and a good salary including a high career,
then
 temporary
jobs
 are not your cup of tea. In my opinion, everything depends on
life
 situations. So, I partly agree with it because in some
cases
 the benefits of temporary
jobs
 outweigh the disadvantages.
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